This is my response to the W3 Challenge this week, which basically is to write a poem and then feed it into http://www.spoonbill.org/n+7/, a site which “replaces the nouns with another one a bit further on in the dictionary. No AI involved.”
So — I wrote a Triolet in response to the vitriol on the news. There’s a HUGE part of me that wishes people — not politicians — could sit at the same table and listen to each other.
A triolet is a poem of eight lines, rhyming abaaabab and so structured that the first line recurs as the fourth and seventh and the second as the eighth.
My original:
I sit across the table from
One whose thoughts veer far from mine
“Tell me, friend — why so glum?”
I sit across the table from
Someone wounded by the scrum
I listen, hear the counterline
I sit across the table from
One whose thoughts veer far from mine
The Spoonbill version (with a few tweaks to make it fit the poem structure)
I sit across the tangle from
One whose times veer far from mob
“Tell me, future — why so glum?”
I sit across the tangle from
Someone wounded by the scrum
I listen, hear about your job
I sit across the tangle from
One whose times veer far from mob
_______________
New word for me, which I think I love because it so suits the situation:
Counterline: A secondary melody that contrasts with the main melody and is played at the same time.
Listen. Really listen. Can you hear both melodies?
Hot Dogs and Marmalade 
Very clever 💜💜
Interesting
I used the site twice but I didn’t really find any words that I wanted to change. I know that isn’t following the directions but it did work well for you! The word exchanges fit nicely.
I had to pick through and rearrange a little. It wasn’t easy to get something that made sense.
I was trying to find new vocabulary. That seems to be where I need help the most in changing “typical” words to something a bit more artistic or meaningful.
Both are very good. Out of curiosity- would you use this tool again?
It was a good exercise — and made for some interesting words choices. I’m so used to looking at/for synonyms that to see words that simply began with the same letters was quite different! I’m not sure I would use it again, but I really did enjoy the exercise.
Now to re-answer this — The more I read others’ poems, the more potential I see for the tool. Yes, I will try it again!
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I thought this was fun- but I still liked my original- as I like yours in this case as well!
Have you posted yours? I couldn’t find it.
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Well done Sally – your transformation through the N+7 process creates magic! ‘Tangle’ perfectly captures communication’s complexity, while maintaining the triolet’s musical heart. The experimental process yields surprisingly profound, contemporary poetry. Beautiful!
“Tell me, future — why so glum?”–this is a great line. (K)
I like that you were able to make a second poem that made some sense. I didn’t follow directions.
Very clever!
Counterline works well for the triolet. Very clever. Well done.
Clever! I like the counterline element. I also really enjoyed the change from “Tell me, friend” to “Tell me, future”.
Well done!
Very nicely done!
hi, Sally 😍
Just wanna let you know that this week’s touching W3 prompt, hosted by our wonderful Sheila Bair, is now live:
Enjoy❣️
Much love,
David
P.S. I’m sorry I hadn’t commented on this post before – there’s been a lot going on in my corner of the world of late…