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Fireflies

Sally

At the first blink of a firefly in the backyard, we run outside. One blip is followed by two, then six. Soon the whole yard is a-twinkle with stringless winged fairy lights that we try to catch because surely a jarful would light up a whole room.

Such a plain beetle
Wings folded, frankly boring
Then magic begins

This is my response to the W3 prompt this week which is to write a haibun, use onomatopoeia three times, use the theme of “The Beauty of Night.”

A haibun is a new form for me. It combines prose and haiku. I’m not 100% sure I did it right.

Onomatopoeia — blink, blip, twinkle — I hope they count.

The Beauty of Night — bioluminescence is amazing and beautiful, right?

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12 thoughts on “Fireflies”

  1. Haibun question for you Haibun experts: Is the prose part supposed to be written more like free verse? Should it look like this?

    At the first blink of a firefly in the backyard,
    we run outside.
    One blip
    is followed by two,
    then six.

    Soon the whole yard is a-twinkle
    with stringless winged fairy lights
    that we try to catch
    because
    surely
    a jarful
    would light up
    a whole room.

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  3. Hi Sally! This is a wonderful Haibun! As for your question, the prose portion should be written in sentences like a prose poem. The language should be concise and vivid and be stylized to have maximum impact. Of course the haiku should follow haiku form. The original haibun was a description of a journey and the haiku were not blatantly connected to the journey story but tangentially attached to the theme of the journey…

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