Hey kiddo!
[blah, blah, blah, ditto, ditto]
You’re not even listening but–
What?!
I listen!
You go on about this sin
And that sin — What? I have not
Got
Time — Excuse,
Excuse, excuse! Please produce
Evidence! Evidence? I
Try
To explain —
You’re not listening again.
I found the wrapper! [big eyes,
cries]
You’re busted.
The sad thing is I trusted
You. Sorry, Mom. C’mere, bug —
{{{{hug}}}}
This is my attempt at the W3 challenge this week. Poet of the Week Violet (congrats, Violet!) challenged us to write a poem in two voices.
- Two voices. Two perspectives. Tension lingers in the air.
- Can they find common ground? Will the conversation spark understanding or fracture further?
- You decide.
- Write a poem—any form, or none at all—that captures the heart of a difficult conversation.
This is an Irish form – Deibide Baise Fri Toin – that I’m slowly figuring out. 3-7-7-1 syllables. Line 1 and 2 rhyme on two syllables, lines 3 and 4 rhyme on one.
Hot Dogs and Marmalade 
A cute argument
Aw! That ending was sweet! Great poem, Sally!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
Now I’m wondering what the wrapper was for. Candy?
It did capture a back and forth of an argument that’s resolved.
Sounds like a complicated form. You executed it wonderfully!
Sally this is delicious! There is a conversation but it is very much between the participants and the audience is left our. We can only guess about the topic… Wonderful!
One of those conversations that so often occur between a parent and child…each one not giving the other long enough to explain, then bam the realization that it’s about something else entirely, and they always end in forgiveness. Great write.
Sally, I love how the form mirrors the sharp turns and soft landings of a real parent-child exchange.
~David
hi, Sally❣️
I just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted for the very first time by the wonderful Ooko Tonny, is now live:
Enjoy 😃
Much love,
David